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Mary Sue Test

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Character: Ice Crystal

1. [] They are possessed by an angel. 

2. [/] They are possessed by a demon.

3. [] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie.

4. [x] They are physically strong.

5. [] They have a rare hair/fur color.

6. [] Their eyes are an unusual color. 

7. [] This eye color happens to be red.

8. [/] Their eyes change color.

9. [/] They have wings.

10. [] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift.

11. [/] They are immortal. (Can't die from age, but everything else, yeah.)

12. [] [If female.] They have a large breast size. 

13. [] [If male.] They are very muscular.

14. [/] They are very attractive to the opposite gender.

15. [?] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc. (She's an alicorn/unicorn????)

16. [/] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc.

17. [] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers.

18. [x] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet.

19. [x] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers.

20. [] They are a healer. 

21. [x] They are from a very rich/royal family. 

22. [x] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background. 

23. [x] They have lost one/both of their parents.

24. [] They ran away from home.

25. [] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc. 

26. [] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death.

27. [] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature. 

28. [] They never knew their parents.

29. [] They were abused/spoiled as a child. 

30. [/] They are very attractive to the same gender. 

31. [] They have lots of friends/no friends.

32. [] They are emo/cutesy.

33. [] They look much younger/older than they really are.

34. [] They are currently in a relationship.

35. [/] They have lots of morals and declare them a fair bit. 9

36. [x] They have a mental disorder. Anxiety and OCD

37. [x] They have an emotional disorder. 

38. [] They struggle to stay sane. 

39. [] They are a psycho. 

40. [] They have multiple personalities. 

41. [/] They are very intelligent

42. [x] They have hallucinations. 

43. [] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.

44. [] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet. 

45. [] They have a guardian spirit.

46. [x] They have a 'special type' of soul. 

47. [] Their soul is not the same as them. 

48. [] They can talk to spirits/demons/angels etc.. 

49. [] Some part of their body glows.

50. [] They have a rare/unusual name. 

51. [x] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, etc

52. [] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth/a young age. 

53. [x] They are connected with a certain element. 

54. [] They are connected with a certain animal. 

55. [?] They always dress like a certain "label".

56. [] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga.

57. [] They are a race/species that is discriminated/against/misunderstood. 

58. [/] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared.

59. [x] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives.

60. [/] They are hiding from someone/something.

61. [] They have a rare blood type. 

62. [/] They cry blood.

63. [x] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown.

64. [x] They are from a different country to where they live.

65. [] They are very mysterious/dark. 

66. [] They are very lively/happy.

67. [] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly.

68. [] They are very patient.

69. [] They are from a long line of assassins. 

70. [] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear.

71. [x] They have amnesia.

72. [x] They have some sort of harmful curse upon them.

73. [x] They are involved in some sort of prophecy.

74. [] They are 'the chosen one'.

75. [/] They have insomnia

Overall Points : 22.5

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Point Reduction :: 
Take points off your OC's overall score if they fit any of the following statements :

1. [] They smoke. 
2. [] They are an alcoholic.
3. [] They are overweight.
4. [] They are addicted to drugs. 
5. [x] They have a short temper.
6. [] They enjoy bullying others. 
7. [] They do not care much about others.
8. [] They are relatively emotionless. 
9. [x] They have some sort of permanent medical condition.

Total: 2

Final Score : 20.5

RESULT ::  Borderline Mary-Sue. 

05 :: Anti-Sue.
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they score that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit. 

06-15 :: Balanced Character. 
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though. 

16-25 :: Borderline Mary-Sue. 
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too. 

26 :: Mary-Sue. 
Please revise your character... NOW.
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...yeeeaah, I'm very tired of how she looks, so I'm changing a few things so she doesn't seem so..undeveloped.

Mane Change: After meeting Amethyst Ribbons, Ice was promptly dragged to her job at the PonyVille Spa for a special treatment along with a much needed mane cut. After some much needed scrubbing, washing and pampering, the mare ended up with a fresh new look; her bangs on her right side of her horn, layers, and a much cleaner, shorter style. It allows her to not be so warm in the the PonyVille's summer heat. Same went for her tail, in which was cut quite a bit shorter. (Ice relished the fact that it no longer dragged in the dirt and became a rat's nest.) But on a very important note regarding her species of equine, she got a full bodied coat trim. Before, it actually looked quite uneven. But when she looked in the mirror, she was a tad bit confused as to why Aloe kept her ankle fur a bit longer then the rest of her body. This was when Aloe reveals to Ice that she is built like a mix of draft horses. This explained the lovely hoof feathers (long fur that grows at the base of the leg) that she will grow out later on.

Ice Crystal's Official Redesign! by TheAngriestHorse



NO WINGS Head Cannon: That's right! In the form you see above, she has no wings. This is because I've decided to have not only her title stripped, but many physical, mental, and even magical abilities that was supposed to be gifted to her. Thus, giving her this de-powered form. And to clarify, her and her sister were NOT born alicorns. (Seriously, I fucking hate Flurry Heart and her Mary-Sue ass..) Even her parents weren't born alicorns. In this world, becoming a(n) god/goddess/alicorn is given to those who are deemed worthy by previous gods. Ice and Citrine were in line to become alicorns on their coronation, but for some reason, only Citrine was accepted. Confused, enraged, and even more jealous, Ice was soon consumed by a dark lust for recognition and power, she called upon the demons beyond Tartarus, and (hesitantly) tried to gain her alicorn title by force. She nearly succeeded, but the powers and sacrifices of those closest to her proved to be more powerful, and she was banished. (How/where she was banished is something that I'm trying to figure out.)

Eye Color Change: Indigo just looks better, tbh. TOO MUCH BLUEEE

ANATOMYYYYYYYYYYYY: After much experimentation and travelling to a few different horse barns, I've decided not only her specific breeds, but her genetics from her whole family. (Most prominent traits first.)

(Father): Shire/Appalooosa
(Mother): Freisian/Thoroughbred/Paint
Citrine Sunset: Thoroughbred/Freisian/Paint
Ice Crystal: Shire/Appaloosa/Thoroughbred

Set Personality: Caring, if not a bit protective. Ice knows her way around puns, but will mentally shut down at the worst/best ones. Also, hurt her once, how could you, hurt her twice, shame on you, hurt her three times, you're officially that guy. Sass and a nasty temper is always ready to leap out at those who forcibly piss her off. But she knows how physically strong she is, so she won't lay a hoof on anyone unless they make the first move. She is very unused to her size, her being heavier, bigger(muscle-wise), and certainly taller. But she's terribly self-concious. She is very aware of the stares, the whispers, and even taunting from other puny ponies. Especially from the stallions. However, she still holds her muzzle up as she takes each powerful step. Though, not all of these comments are negative, as some stallions are quite enchanted by her size. (Damn kinky-ass bastards, she would grumble.) But to her friends, she is known as empathetic, trusting, and even quite motherly at times.


Now get excited, nerds.
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..I shall reveal the pronouns of not only myself, but all of my OCs. (Not just ponies)

Ice Crystal
:female: 
-She/Her
-Bisexual

Amethyst Ribbons
:female: 
-She/Her
-Pansexual (preference for females - crushing on Ice)

Evening Flame
:female: 
-Pronoun-Apethetic
-Aromantic/Asexual

Blue Tunes
:female: 
-He/Him
-Lesbean 

Tina
:female:+:male: 
-She/Her
-Lesbeaan

Mila
:female:+:male: 
-She/Her
-LeSBeaAAn

Cory
:female:+:male: 
-They/their
-Bisexual

CC
:female:
-She/Her
-Pansexual

Kalos
:female: 
-She/Her
-Bisexual (denies it)

(Unnamed Acid Wolf)
:male:(???)
-Pronoun-Apethetic
-Pansexual (preference for males)

(Unnamed Wind Fox)
(???)
-Pronoun-Apethetic
-Panromantic (no apparent preferences)

The Koot
:female: 
-She/Her
-Biromantic
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the universe just LOVES proving me wrong, doesn't it?
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if one more person i know dies, or fucking leaves me.
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